Champagne Symphony

This is a song that came together last weekend.  One of the only times something has come together quickly for me.  The backing track is a loop of the first few seconds of Ghosts of a Different Dream by Guided By Voices. http://soundcloud.com/felix-lin/never-make-another-sound   Lyrics: [A] I can sing anything when you’re around Please don’t go I would never make another sound ‘Cause you hold the key to my every treasure That key you just tossed away [B] You walk on out the door Shock me to the core Walk on out the door I just hit the floor ‘Cause without you here Nothing feels the same Without you here There’s no one else to blame Without you here Nothing stays the same Without you here There’s no one left to blame [A] [B] [A] [Outro] Oh, I’m going nowhere Oh, I’m doomed to fall (Repeat to End)

So this is the first song I've ever finished, but I've been sitting on it for a few months now.  I just can't figure out how to make the lyrics sound right.  They're just so stupid and saccharine, and they stay that way no matter what I do.  There's also that annoying buzzing in the back ground that's reminding me I need to get a better microphone.  I suppose at least it all sounds really pretty.  Maybe I'm just not meant to write pop songs.  If anyone reading this has any suggestions for improv ement, please let me know.  At the very least, I figure it'll be pretty entertaining. http://soundcloud.com/felix-lin/falling-apart Lyrics: [Verse 1] I can’t believe that old sweatshirt Looks good on you even now Though it seems you’re tearing down my world With what’s coming out of your mouth How could you, goddess, oh Venus Deem it right to strike me so You wouldn’t go for my bridle Guess I have to let you go [Chorus] You w...

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